daredevil muffin-y genius ([info]monanotlisa) wrote,
@ 2005-12-03 19:12:00
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Much like orange marmalade...

...I was on a roll.


1. Made a card -- nothing special at all, just a li'l one, but since a few of my friends asked to be shown the result, here we go:





2. Wrote fic --

or, okay, not really; I wrote some quick-n dirty comment-smut after reading [info]smittywing's The Best Things in Life are Free -- Part One, Part Two, and whoa, who'd thought I had a thing for High School AUs -- you? You? I sure didn't, burned badly from most of the Jossverse ones I stumbled upon, probably because I couldn't really appreciate taking the metaphor out of the story...anyway.

This, I warn you, has few redeeming qualities and probably requires reading her first two chapters.





Maybe John, who can't quite categorise this whole thing but who isn't stupid, not by a long shot, at first thinks it's simple, that he just likes hanging with Rodney -- not so bad, after all, for a geek -- but there's something else, something that catches him by surprise one sunny afternoon when they're in his dad's kitchen and he passes Rodney a soda from the fridge, when his fingers brush Rodney's -- no, not a spark of electricity or any of that nonsense, but when he ducks his head, he catches the look in the other boy's eyes, and it's -- it's strange and weird and sends a fucking rush through him. With a click, all things fall into place, all the wide-eyed smiles and quick frowns and that tiny quiver of Rodney's lips when he talks to him; it makes sense now, he knows, he *knows*. And John feels something strange, right there, the drops of condensation still on his fingers and the sound of Rodney opening the can in his ears, a sensation in his stomach that's almost like he's feeling sick, only there's this burst of excitement flushing his body, hot and cold -- which is all wrong, really, not so much because Rodney's a boy, dammit, but because he's just...well, a geek, badly-dressed and fast-talking in a smart-ass way, whose harebrained ten-steps programme to get rid of being so desperately uncool he had to accept to avoid getting into trouble, only because of that -- Rodney's embarrassing, if one really looked at it, only that John hasn't really done that before, but of course, now it's different, personal because he doesn't just have a fan but a boy with a crush on his hands (or, Jesus, other places). And a part of John wishes he could un-realise it, not that there is such a thing, and he's so acutely aware of Rodney, Rodney close by, drinking his coke with the blissed-out expression John's only seen with other people in -- other circumstances, and now it's really hard for him not to think of Rodney -- then. But, he gets a hold of himself, takes a deep breath, and manages to grin at Rodney, asking some inane question he forgets the second after; and they leave the kitchen and watch Flight of the Intruder together, Rodney's eyes very blue in the glare of the TV screen.


And John shouldn't, really, but he sees them now, the not-so-furtive glances Rodney sends his way, because really, Rodney isn't subtle -- brows furrowed in concentration when he watches John on his board, bendy, quicksilver in the sun, or the slightly glassy-eyed stare when his gaze drops to John's lips, even glassier when he checks out John's ass. It's a complete coincidence that John finds his old blue jeans in the back of the closet when he's rifling through his stuff, washed and worn and very tight-fitting, but he snags them and wears them, and totally doesn't notice the surprised "oh" of Rodney's mouth, soft and open for just a moment too long. John thinks he can't be blamed for that last bit, really, because Rodney has this insanely expressive mouth, ready to smirk or do that funny little down-turn in one corner at a moment's notice, and that's not mentioning the way it looks when Rodney is eating a chocolate bar, all but inhaling it, enthusiastic, happy, and that very image -- well, if John wonders how Rodney's mouth would look wrapped around other things, it's only the next logical step, right? John's a man of action, of course, so when his father is gone for the weekend, he invites Rodney for a Saturday night at his place and gets his hands on some porn -- this is what guys, do, after all; watching porn together and jerking off, and hey, if Rodney has other ideas that involve his mobile mouth and John's dick, that'll be just fine, too. Rodney lets out a little gulp when John smirks and shoves the tape at him, telling him to start the vid already, but John drops his voice, makes his eyes linger on Rodney's face for an extra second because he definitely doesn't want to spook him. And Rodney nods, bites his lips, broad hands -- hands that John has seen handle wires so fine they could barely be seen without a microscope with grace and ease -- trembling just a little when inserting the tape. And when the sights and the sounds from the TV fill the room, John leans back, hands dropping onto his stomach, feeling excitement uncoil slowly, deliciously. He's still looking at and listening to the TV, but he can't help but hear these familiar puffs of breath, too, watch -- out of the corner of his eye -- how Rodney wets his lips.


It gives him a thrill, welcome if a little frightening, but looking back at the screen, it's familiar enough, big boobs and naked female bodies and the loud moans that never fail to send shivers down his spine and to make him hard, gloriously hard. John slides his hand down, down, past his stomach; it's not just his imagination, the hitch in Rodney's breath when he touches the first button, pops it open, moves to the second one -- he has to close his eyes for a moment, but then, his pants are open, and he's freed his dick. He wants to close his fist around it, go rough and fast -- but it'd be over to quick, and he wishes to draw this out, stretch the time spent here with Rodney like salt-water taffy. Only when he's exhaled and started with a lighter touch, using three fingers to slide up and down in a gentle motion, he allows himself to look at Rodney again -- Rodney, who still has his pants zipped but whose fingers are clutching at the carpet, whose eyes are not at all on the screen, not watching anything but his, John's dick, and who wears an expression on his face that makes John swallow, clench his teeth, go a little faster. Rodney's hard, there's no doubt, not a little bit, but he makes no move to open his own pants, instead looking down at John, only at John, who in turn glances at the slack curve of Rodney's lips, wondering, wishing, wanting; not that this isn't good, it is, he just thinks it'd be fair if Rodney would -- look at him, and Rodney's is looking at him, straight into his eyes now, and this, finally, is too much, and John gasps and comes, fast and hard and good. He opens his eyes again -- Rodney's jumped to his feet, breath too quick and eyes feverish, but before John can make himself move, can open his mouth, tell him to relax and take it easy, Rodney is already bolting out of the door, mumbling something about homework and physics and watering the garden, and he's gone. Gone, leaving a dazed John who'd thought it'd be easier to get a blowjob from the gay neighbour's boy who carries the sort of torch that can probably seen from the other end of town for him.


John knows that Rodney liked it, liked *him*, and just like that, too, but it seems this isn't so simple, not even between buddies, which they aren't by default or shared football jacket, and he realises that maybe Rodney's too freaked although, really, why would he be, but still, maybe their deal is off now, and -- and there it is again, a sliver of of fear, sharp and cool and making something clench painfully. Because yeah, Rodney'd want his money back, or an exactly calculated fraction of the sum, and John would have to explain to his father, which'd be a minor apocalypse and can't happen, ever. John would apologise, only he doesn't know how because his father laying down the law of manners and proper behaviour didn't include saying I'm Sorry For Jacking Off In Front Of You (And Oh, Hoping You'd Blow Me), so he's a bit at a loss, there -- still is when Rodney rings at his door the next morning, not looking him in the eye, not looking at any part of his body, in fact, but when John's just about to say something, Rodney's already launched into this tirade about the duties of a future supergenius of America -- yes, yes, never mind the fact he's Canadian; research grants and facilities tend to be better in the good old US of A, so this is the most promising option -- which segues into the physics *and* chemistry homework for today, and how he wanted to stay but totally had to run and how he reallyreally couldn't stay. Rodney's voice is like water, a never-ending stream of it, and John lets it wash over him, cool and surprisingly gentle, smoothing out edges he hadn't known were there, and he relaxes and smiles and they walk to school together. They're good and easy for four days or so, when it's suddenly the weekend again, with John's father gone (not for all of it but Friday night for sure), which Rodney knows because he's memorised the travel schedule on the board next to the door the first time he came around, after a fleeting glance at it, and when he tells John that, perhaps, watching a movie would be the cool thing to do, his cheeks are flaming, but his eyes are fierce, and right there, John thinks Rodney's pretty damn awesome.


Rodney even rings the doorbell in a determined way, and John wonders fleetingly if he'll have to bite back a laugh, but when he opens the door, Rodney looks resolute and all-tough and so damn hopeful that John's grin softens into a smile. Rodney steps past him -- damn if he didn't take a deep breath while doing so -- and they head for the kitchen first, by unspoken agreement, where they stay for a while to decide on the pizza to order because with Rodney, that always takes *ages*, most of which are spent on listening to a detailed report on his allergies that are, really, if you poke a little, food sensibilities...except for the actually dangerous citrus fruit thing, which John has made sure to make a mental note of because giving CPR to Rodney in the lunch room isn't high on his To Do list, although, of course, the part of that *not* about life-threatening conditions isn't as unappealing as it should be, and the image stays with John, in the back of his mind, until they finally move over to his room with its TV set, its VCR, and the new tape John got -- if he chose more carefully this time, namely one that features a foursome of two girls and two guys, okay, that's just to make Rodney, who obviously isn't all that into girls, a bit more relaxed. And they settle down in front of the bed, John already feeling that low-grade hum in his body, even before Rodney snags the tape out of his hands with a quick look that's all dare -- and pops it in, strong fingers steady. John leans back against the edge of the bed, the screen flickers to life, and there isn't much preliminary action, which is good because John doesn't think he can wait, definitely doesn't want to wait; he stares at the screen, and yes that works, sex and heat and more sex, and no, he doesn't look over yet, doesn't yet glance at Rodney, instead works open his zipper, teasing his himself only for a moment -- letting his fingers drag over the length of his cock, once -- before taking himself out and stroking, gently, with a hiss he can't hold back, and now, now, he'll turn his head a little and look at Rodney who -- who has opened his own pants, is actually shucking them down a little in order to touch himself more easily, leaning on his elbows and lifting his ass a little, and John's mouth feels dry, and he cannot *not* watch these little Rodney-movements, the annoyed sound he makes when his pants don't disappear as quickly and easily as they did on the screen. And Rodney's still looking down, but he glances over at John's dick again, tongue darting over his lips, and John grips himself tighter -- Rodney has finally freed his own cock, thick and blunt and shiny, and John has to tear his eyes away, stares at Rodney's face instead, only that this doesn't help, not at all; John stares at the blush spreading there, the sheer film of sweat reflecting the light from the tv set, the wide eyes fluttering shut for just the fraction of a second. It's -- John feels light-headed, almost like that time he managed a back-flip on his skateboard, because Rodney's impossibly -- John can't look away, wants to make him feel even better, and the realisation that hits him like a freight train is hotter than hell and even scarier, or would be if John wasn't already half-there, scooting down, ignoring (only, not) Rodney's gasp of surprise when he reaches out and touches the other boy's dick, smooth and startlingly foreign under his fingers, and when he hears the sounds Rodney makes when he starts jerking him off, he's already gone too far, can make the last step, too, and lower his head: Salt, musk, an explosion of *heat* on his tongue, and swirling his tongue around the head is not half as weird as he -- hadn't really thought about; the utterly best thing is the way Rodney's hands ghost over his hair, touch the side of his face, graze the curve of his ear, which sends shivers down his spine, shivers that John can feel all the way down in his own dick, and Rodney's panting now, moaning loud enough to drone out the TV, and that, again, is making John so hard he tries settling his weight on only one arm so he can touch himself -- but Rodney's tugging at him now, frantically, amazingly strong, and he manages to drag John back up, pushing him half-up against the side of the bed, and then, he has only a second to stare into Rodney's face, soft lips and blue, blue eyes, and then, they are kissing, licking into each other's mouth, fierce and so good, and that's Rodney's hand on his dick, and yeah, he's dexterous, alright, dragging John's hand back to his, Rodney's dick, and John knows he's never come so hard in his life.

And when, after what does feel like an eternity of just lying there with Rodney's mouth against the side of his neck, each breath stirring the fine hairs there, making him tingle pleasantly, he turns his head and really looks at Rodney, who stares back at him with something like wonder, he knows he's totally not alone with this.











A/N:
1. I should stick to real stories with dialogue and, y'know, plot -- a tight stream-of-consciousness, with all its run-on sentences and insertions, is a pain in the butt to read, I know. But hey, it's an experiment, and I'd never written John-POV before, let alone posted explicit smut in an open entry. Eep.
2. Or maybe this doesn't need a beta as much as being actually written.
3. If you need the picture of a younger David Hewlett to imagine teen!Rodney, or want teen!John -- check this out:

High School AU Icons + links to pics of a young David Hewlett







Also -- isn't this the best. Icon. Ever? [info]dar_jeeling made it for me for Christmas according to my wishes, only better, and I just couldn't wait. Thank you, dar_ling!


Okay, off to party now; hope he likes the b-day card...


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[info]trinityofone
2005-12-03 07:31 pm UTC (link)
Are you kidding? That was not painful to read at all. That was...guh, teenage lust and teenage confusion and wow, so hot. I loved John's stream-of-consciousness, which is a style I've always thought can be very sexy when done right because it's so breathless, and this is, this captures that perfectly. I also love that John's porn-plan succeeds without succeeding the way he expected--that's Rodney for you. ;-) So yeah, I loved it.

And... *deep breath* I'm also glad that [info]dar_jeeling made that icon for you: it's fab. Post with it lots!

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-03 07:37 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]dar_jeeling
2005-12-03 08:51 pm UTC (link)
Allow me a moment of incoherency. asdfjkllkjfsda!!1!
Oh, John, you're so clueless.
I love how you wrote the rush he's experiencing. Also, very hot. <3!

*preview* Ah, well, I said I'd be incoherent, didn't I?

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 02:18 am UTC (Expand)

[info]saturn92103
2005-12-03 10:46 pm UTC (link)
This was great. The stream of consciousness worked perfectly.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 02:21 am UTC (Expand)

[info]thegrrrl2002
2005-12-03 10:52 pm UTC (link)
Oh, your comment smut is just wonderful. I haven't read the story in question, because I'm not particularly fond of the genre, but your smut took my breath away. Wicked hot.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 02:24 am UTC (Expand)

[info]jwaneeta
2005-12-04 12:47 am UTC (link)
The card is beautiful! Striking design. You've got me all inspired, now.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 02:25 am UTC (Expand)

[info]mecurtin
2005-12-04 01:17 am UTC (link)
The stream-of-consciousness totally works. The only style point that didn't work for me is that the paragraphs are too long, they need to be broken up for better ease of reading (at least by me).

I find this kind of teenage-exploration *TOTALLY HOT*. With extra HOTT. The way John looks but doesn't look, his seduction setup, everything. I especially like that both boys are young, but smart, when it comes down to it: John figures out how Rodney feels without being told, and then in the week between date #1 & date #2 Rodney figures out what's up (heh) with John, too, and neither of them has to do that icky *talking about their feelings* thing, which would be totally not them.

She says coherently. In sum: write more.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 02:31 am UTC (Expand)
(no subject) - [info]auburnnothenna, 2005-12-04 09:47 pm UTC (Expand)
(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 10:24 pm UTC (Expand)

stellahobbit
2005-12-04 02:17 am UTC (link)
That was fantastic! It flowed so smoothly and the depth of feeling you showed us was perfect.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 02:35 am UTC (Expand)

[info]fishsanwitt
2005-12-04 04:37 am UTC (link)
Your card is *beautiful*.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 12:16 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]eccentric_alex
2005-12-04 07:42 am UTC (link)
*starts breathing again* Um. I found that out-of-reason hot. And that picture is great, because I've been having problems visualizing Rodney for TBTILAF. It is also great because, um, guh. And it wasn't hard to read, quite the opposite actually, and is accurate to what I remember from being in situations like that- well, okay, not exactly like that, but the kinda-awkward teenage stuff, where there aren't a lot of words and you have to guess and hope, even when it's obvious as the sun at noon, and your stomach does an entire Olympic gymnastics routine.

This bit- Rodney's eyes very blue in the glare of the TV screen.
- I was just going to say that I liked it, but I read the whole sentence it was in, and realized again that it's exactly right, because that's the kind of shit you notice and do in a situation like that, and the whole thing is like that, and damn, I have to commend you. I don't know how old you are, but you remember. And not only that but you can tell it much more clearly than I probably ever will be able to, no matter how far away from it I get.

Also, that's a really cool card- I hope he liked it, 'cuze I've never gotten something like that, and, dude, envy.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 12:25 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]carolyn_claire
2005-12-04 11:45 am UTC (link)
I should stick to real stories with dialogue and, y'know, plot -- a tight stream-of-consciousness, with all its run-on sentences and insertions, is a pain in the butt to read, I know.

No way, babe--that was terrific. *happy sigh*

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 12:26 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]bibliokat
2005-12-04 03:45 pm UTC (link)
Ooooo, that was awesome! I actually liked the stream of consciousness for this because you can feel what John's feeling/thinking along with him, though I'm not sure I'd like it in a longer fic.

I adore John setting up a seduction, especially since it doesn't work the first time and determined Rodney! Very hot comment fic, thanks for sharing!

P.S. I like David Hewlett now, but young David is really cute-hot! Swoon-worthy even.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 03:59 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]panisdead
2005-12-04 04:55 pm UTC (link)
Gaaahhh. I was totally going to do a drive-by comment in your journal to tell you that [info]eliade wrote girl!John! In a bikini! in my LJ here, and then there was amazing high school AU porn! *friends you liek whoa*

I am such a fan of the early sexploration stuff, and this, with the not-looking and Rodney's bravery and John's (hah!) foursome porn, totally nails everything fun about the genre for me.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 05:20 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]justabi
2005-12-04 06:37 pm UTC (link)
Wow, that was hot. And nice icon!

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 06:44 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]aurora_84
2005-12-04 06:41 pm UTC (link)
This is really, really hot. Guh.

And this wasn't 'a pain in the butt to read' at all. It flowed really great, a bit breathless, just like the atmosphere. I love your John voice.

Also, hot. =)

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 06:48 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]lonespark
2005-12-04 06:45 pm UTC (link)
Guh.
Mmmm...
Nice. Captures the breathless desire and revelation and hope and terror and rightness of teenagehood.
I like that they didn't have to talk. I remember my own experiences involving a lot of talking and kind of saying things you thought you meant, because you were too young to realize you wouldn't mean it in a few months. Best to avoid that and just have hot sex.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 07:24 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]baby_jeans
2005-12-04 07:11 pm UTC (link)
See, what's sad is that Sorry For Jacking Off In Front Of You (And Oh, Hoping You'd Blow Me) sounds kinda like a song (parody) that I'd totally listen to. And sing. In public, despite not having the parts.

And now I'm sad that it doesn't really exist. ;_;

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 07:16 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]busarewski
2005-12-04 08:41 pm UTC (link)
Came here via smittywing and can I just say Wow! So hot. I have come to love teen!John & Rodney ridiculously much since reading her fic. And your amazing sexploration (love that word) continuation just throw me. very very hot, and so _true_ and right there. Your style worked beautifully and again, the hot!! =)

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 10:26 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]teaphile
2005-12-04 09:01 pm UTC (link)
I love the racing style of this. It fits so perfectly with the situation. There's nothing I don't like about the whole story.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 10:27 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]darkhavens
2005-12-04 10:09 pm UTC (link)
That was wonderful! A teenage boy's head is such an amusing place to be. So full of sexin'! ;)

And that icon - can you imagine what the 'biology' cap would look like? *whimpers*

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-04 10:28 pm UTC (Expand)

[info]lamardeuse
2005-12-04 11:20 pm UTC (link)
Yeow. Za.

*spontaneously combusts*

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-05 01:09 am UTC (Expand)

[info]glitterandlube
2005-12-04 11:42 pm UTC (link)
*loves* This was lovely! And that card was cool as hell. Thanks!

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-05 10:31 am UTC (Expand)
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[info]libra_traveller
2005-12-05 01:47 am UTC (link)
Yes, because we all know boys watch porn together and jack each other off between studying for tests. Heh. I loved it though.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-05 10:33 am UTC (Expand)

[info]not_sally
2005-12-05 06:05 am UTC (link)
yeah, wow. So hot, and so sweet and the icon does totally rock.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-05 10:34 am UTC (Expand)

[info]jcalanthe
2005-12-05 07:59 am UTC (link)
So fucking hot! Teen!John is adorable. The stream of consciousness worked for me too - it took a bit to get into the flow, but then I was totally sucked in & couldn't put it down.

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(no subject) - [info]monanotlisa, 2005-12-05 10:36 am UTC (Expand)

[info]libitina
2005-12-05 01:38 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for the pointer - It's very yummy porn. And I love how it goes from "Oooo... maybe he'd... oh, maybe..." to "I have to! I can not resist the power of the cock." It's warm and cozy and nervous and all tingly porny.

I love these porn around the edges fics to smitty's fic.

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