09 August 2007 @ 01:22 am
FIC: After the Drought (SGA)  
Happy birthday, [info]auburnnothenna. I totally blew making yoghurt AND studying for this. It's just a tiny offering, we are unworthy, etc. pp. *g*



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Fandom: Stargate Atlantis
Title: After the Drought
Set: after "Sateda"
Rating: PG
Words: 1000
Summary: John raised a single eyebrow. "Which is why we came to help in the first place. Or well, we came, we saw dusty plains, and you had a man-versus-nature victory."



It was raining.

A lot. Not cats and dogs, maybe, but John was almost sure he'd seen a quick flash of green in the torrent. Where the hell did all the water come from?

Listening more closely to Rodney's technobabble would've made the frog question superfluous, but John had been kind of pre-occupied back in the crystal dome. Two things were official now: Robot armies were only fun on TV screens, and no, there wasn't any limit to wacky Ancient inventions. Hooray for C-4, Ronon's pulse pistol, and Teyla's ability to do...well, anything.

John squeezed water out of his eyes, then shook his head so that droplets went flying.

Into Rodney's face, who squealed and took a funny half-step back. "Colonel! Stop it."

John grinned. "You're already wet."

They both were, in fact. Rodney's hair was almost black in the half-light of dusk, standing up in spikes and swirls. Water was still clinging to his lashes, the tip of his nose, making Rodney frown and wipe the back of his hand over his face. "For the record, this is exactly what I'd hoped to avoid."

They hadn't made it back to the gate, or even just to the village where Ronon and Teyla were currently waiting for them. This hollowed-out tree had come in handy, though, when the rain had started. All thanks to Rodney.

John peered outside. "Think the Ibtans are dancing in the fields right now?"

"If you can call them such."

"Well, they are the people of Ibta --"

"Fields! You know what I meant: that after seven years of drought, there wasn't much culture left in their agriculture."

John raised a single eyebrow. "Which is why we came to help in the first place. Or well, we came, we saw dusty plains, and you had a man-versus-nature victory."

Rodney snorted and made a dismissive hand gesture. T-shirt soaked to the bone, the fabric was tighter than ever around his arms, his shoulders. John glanced back up at his face when Rodney spoke again. "Yes, yes, complex system defunct for aeons, genius very much required, but we're talking about a localised system of literally thousands of pre-established Ancient weather modification satellites."

No frogs. Okay.

"It can't even be used for other planets, let alone against the Wraith."

That note in Rodney's voice wasn't one John liked, especially not after a mission this successful. He stepped a little closer, nudged Rodney's shoulder lightly with his, feeling warmth stubborn as Rodney himself. "You know, for their saviour --"

"Hah!"

"-- you're a little blasé, don't you think?" Winding Rodney up never stopped being fun. He made an extra-thoughtful face. "Maybe they'll make you their rain god."

"Oh, please.."

"Build you little altars. Sacrifice little Power Bar replicas."

"Your wit's astounding as always, Sheppard." Not especially amused, but at least Rodney didn't sound quite so unhappy any more. He wasn't smiling, but he looked at John for another moment, which was -- well, John didn't really know how he felt about Rodney's eyes on him like that. "Actually, you didn't do too badly back in the dome. Nice work."

John couldn't help a tiny jolt of pleasure, despite the fact he really shouldn't. Bleeding cuts or bruises wouldn't get him a fraction of the reaction Rodney always had when John used his mind. "Hey, we both did good work there."

"We always do." Rodney nodded and, for some reason, still didn't look away. A slight frown appeared on his face. "Of course, I know, we're team; it's just your job."

Volleying answers to riddles in a city made of glass while Ronon shot automatons and Teyla set up explosives -- no, John was pretty certain that hadn't been in the job description. "It's more than that."

True, but also a little more than John had really wanted to say, mostly because Rodney was now staring at him in earnest, and Jesus, did Rodney seriously think John was going to give a little speech about how valuable Rodney was, not just to the mission? John swallowed, turned on his heel to stick his head outside again. "Look, I think the rain --"

"Is still falling, thanks, Colonel." Rodney's voice was way too dry for this particular situation. "Guess you'll have to endure being stuck here."

Not entirely sure that there was an implied with me, John still didn't like this answer. "It's not that. I just --" he blew out a huff of air, still carefully not looking at Rodney but at shrubbery and water, so much of it. "I'm not good with the whole thing where we talk about how much we mean to each other."

A second of silence. Two. Three. John started to sweat a little.

It didn't help when Rodney finally spoke again. "Mean? To each other?" His voice was too high and a little shaky to boot.

John had meant -- he'd meant the team, all of them. Feeling what he felt for Teyla and Ronon, plus Elizabeth, and yeah, okay, for Rodney too. He hadn't meant --

"You and me?"

Okay, that -- John shivered at the words, which was strange in light of the fact he felt hot rather than cold.

The next thing he felt was warm air against the side of his neck. Warm breath. It really wasn't --

"What, you've thought about...this?" Funny how with so many inhalations, Rodney could still sound kind of breathless. "Sheppard?"

He really hadn't. Of course, now, on this damp, darkening planet, John wondered if maybe that was the result of some effort on his part. Because Rodney was close, so close, radiating heat. The evaporating water had caused the air to be chilly, so that was really quite welcome. Rodney was. Welcome here, in his space, and that surprised John more than anything else so far.

"No." John finally turned his head, looked right at Rodney, but before that flash of hurt, of confusion had a chance to bloom, John reached out and stepped even closer. Put a hand on Rodney's arm, strong underneath his own. "But I kinda think I should have."



Rodney's mouth didn't taste like rain after a drought or anything like that. It tasted like happiness.



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A/N:
1. Thanks to: [info]mmmchelle for lightning-quick beta help, and to [info]twistedchick for the prompt rain after drought. All you twittergals' ideas were great.

2. You can now find the story as either an honest-to-God podbook or a podfic in mp3 format here in my folder of Jinjurly's Audiofic archive.
 
 
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an innovative dabbler: sga_vulnerability_ronon[info]technosage on August 8th, 2007 11:27 pm (UTC)
Oh, this is lovely. The language is evocative, and it's wonderfully sweet without being sappy. Nice twist at the end to get it where you want it, and it feels right.

\o/ Thank you for sharing!
daredevil muffin-y genius: john black - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 8th, 2007 11:30 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much -- means a lot to me! (Hey, how's YOUR fic faring? & ;-)
(no subject) - [info]technosage on August 8th, 2007 11:39 pm (UTC) Expand
SG Atlantis Light: McKay Sheppard On My Mind[info]sgatlantislight on August 8th, 2007 11:50 pm (UTC)
Awwww! Very nice. John loves his team, even if he can't talk about it.
daredevil muffin-y genius: john b/w - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 8th, 2007 11:56 pm (UTC)
Thank you kindly! (He so does. Aw, John.)
Mayhem Parva: Rain (hmwitzy)[info]raincitygirl on August 9th, 2007 12:17 am (UTC)
Aaaaawwwwwww. So aaaaaaaaaawwwwwww.
daredevil muffin-y genius: laughing - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 03:53 pm (UTC)
*ggg*
Anonymity as a Refuge[info]mirabile_dictu on August 9th, 2007 01:56 am (UTC)
Oh, lucky auburn! What a terrific little story! So very sweet, and so in character. It's not my birthday but I still say thank you!
daredevil muffin-y genius: john black - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:16 pm (UTC)
No, thank you for this feedback! I'm longing for sweet stories right now, what with life being decidedly not so. But of course, we still have to have clueless! and emotionally!inarticulate!John, for that is my favourite flavour of him.
Juli[info]jmchau on August 9th, 2007 02:01 am (UTC)
Very nice.
daredevil muffin-y genius[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:19 pm (UTC)
Thanks!
Auburn: Green: Auburn[info]auburnnothenna on August 9th, 2007 05:13 am (UTC)
Lucky, lucky me, indeed. Okay, I feel no guilt over yoghurt and only the tiniest over your studying and this is the finest gift because I can share it with everyone (unlike the cheesecake - none of you can have the cheesecake!).

John is so emotionally inarticulate and suddenly stumbling into awareness. The little hints to what adventure led them to hiding from the rain i a hollow tree, so close the truth comes slipping out, were delightful.

Thank you, thank you, thank you, Mona!
daredevil muffin-y genius: cleavage! - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:22 pm (UTC)
*beam*

Welcome. So very.
Xandri the Gate-pirate: Daniel and Sam - rummaging for answers[info]xandri on August 9th, 2007 07:45 am (UTC)
Beautiful. :D
daredevil muffin-y genius: rodney heights - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:23 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
Ren: Beautiful Teyla[info]red_ajah on August 9th, 2007 08:09 am (UTC)
Very nice! Thoroughly enjoyed this one ^^
daredevil muffin-y genius: laughing - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:23 pm (UTC)
*bow* & :-)
tough love from erin: All this prolonged exposure to radiation[info]eleveninches on August 9th, 2007 08:26 am (UTC)
Mmmm rain fics always make me happy.
daredevil muffin-y genius: john b/w - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:24 pm (UTC)
I sure like rain fic better than rain.
Dorie, Ph.D.[info]sonadorita on August 9th, 2007 09:10 am (UTC)
That was lovely! Especially the last line :) Thanks for sharing!
daredevil muffin-y genius: john b/w - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:24 pm (UTC)
No, thank you!!
lavvyan[info]lavvyan on August 9th, 2007 09:34 am (UTC)
Awww! This made me feel all warm and fuzzy, thank you. :D
daredevil muffin-y genius: john black - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:26 pm (UTC)
Warm's what I aimed for. Thanks.
Sage: sheppard happy[info]sageness on August 9th, 2007 10:21 am (UTC)
Oh, lovely! :D
daredevil muffin-y genius: john b/w - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:26 pm (UTC)
& :-))
Sweeneybird: Sweens and DH[info]sweeneybird on August 9th, 2007 11:29 am (UTC)
this was lovely - you write great Rodney. And also great John. Very sweet and a nice take on their characters.
daredevil muffin-y genius: physics chemistry - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:27 pm (UTC)
Oh wow, what a wonderful compliment -- characterisation working always makes me happy. *beam*
Ask a silly question...[info]emeraldsword on August 9th, 2007 11:32 am (UTC)
yeay. very nicely done, good job :-)
daredevil muffin-y genius: laughing - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:27 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
V.: SGA JohnRodney Chemicals Between Us[info]aurora_84 on August 9th, 2007 12:25 pm (UTC)
Mmmm, this was lovely! We definitely need more rain!fics.
daredevil muffin-y genius: john black - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:28 pm (UTC)
And less rain!

*g* Cheers, babe.
mangst[info]mangst on August 9th, 2007 01:20 pm (UTC)
Aw. This was sweet. And the dialog was very real and natural. :)
daredevil muffin-y genius: cleavage! - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:29 pm (UTC)
So good to hear that it worked for you -- they're the -- thank God ONLY -- voices in my head. & ;-)
Viva La Revolución: dh-TLBT[info]tex on August 9th, 2007 01:29 pm (UTC)
Oh, wow, this was wonderful. I love Rodney getting all breathless and surprised by what he thinks John is saying and how John admits that its been an effort not to think about Rodney in that way. Just greatness!
daredevil muffin-y genius: laughing - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:30 pm (UTC)
Wonderful feedback to come home to -- thank you! Glad the story worked for you; it's a little short, really, so I was hoping it still built emotional momentum. This your comment gave me warm fuzzy feelings in that regard; much appreciated.
(no subject) - [info]tex on August 9th, 2007 08:05 pm (UTC) Expand
Sandy: SGA John & Rodney sans words[info]sp23 on August 9th, 2007 04:24 pm (UTC)
"No." John finally turned his head, looked right at Rodney, but before that flash of hurt, of confusion had a chance to bloom, John reached out and stepped even closer. Put a hand on Rodney's arm, strong underneath his own. "But I kinda think I should have."

Oh, wow, yeah. That was just... I love how a misunderstanding on Rodney's part leads to an understanding. Very, very nice. :)
daredevil muffin-y genius: john b/w - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 04:31 pm (UTC)
Misunderstanding+understanding=OTP

Thank you. & :-)
cupidsbow[info]cupidsbow on August 9th, 2007 06:31 pm (UTC)
I'm making all these little noises: oh and mmmm. Thank you.
daredevil muffin-y genius: laughing - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 07:19 pm (UTC)
Thrilled you liked it, Cathy.
janne_d: sheprodney[info]janne_d on August 9th, 2007 07:21 pm (UTC)
Oh. That was lovely. The last line made me go all melty.

Of course, now, on this damp, darkening planet, John wondered if maybe that was the result of some effort on his part.

Ha, I bet. Quite a big effort.
daredevil muffin-y genius: john black - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 07:48 pm (UTC)
Well, you know John and his superior sense of self. *g* Thank you.
adafrog[info]adafrog on August 9th, 2007 07:40 pm (UTC)
Oh, so very lovely. Thanks.
daredevil muffin-y genius[info]monanotlisa on August 9th, 2007 07:50 pm (UTC)
V. welcome!
Xylo: xylopic[info]xylohypha on August 10th, 2007 12:48 am (UTC)
Awww. *happy*

That description of soaked!Rodney was lovely, and I really enjoyed the back and forth of John and Rodney's dialog.

"Well, they are the people of Ibta --"

Hee! And the conclusion, leading up to that kiss, is making me grin happily even yet. Thank you!
daredevil muffin-y genius: laughing - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 10th, 2007 12:54 am (UTC)
Glad you liked this -- and thank you for the feedback of parts you liked; always the best kind of response. & :-)

(And that you liked that part of the exchange made me grin. C'mon, we know John would play Rodney like this.)
Feathers and confectionary airs[info]puritybrown on August 10th, 2007 01:07 am (UTC)
That's beautiful.
daredevil muffin-y genius[info]monanotlisa on August 10th, 2007 10:28 am (UTC)
Thrilled you think so. & :-)
kyria: gate[info]kyriacarlisle on August 10th, 2007 02:49 am (UTC)
"Everybody and her cat are reading Big Bang fic, I know, but..." some of us are made just as happy by short and sweet.

I like how much you've left to for me to imagine (how did the robots turn on? what did they look like? riddles? Pegasus frogs!), and how the ending is its own answer to a riddle.

Thanks!
daredevil muffin-y genius: mcshep THE LOOK - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 10th, 2007 10:32 am (UTC)
"some of us are made just as happy by short and sweet. "

Thank you! Lovely to hear this.

I like how much you've left to for me to imagine (how did the robots turn on? what did they look like? riddles? Pegasus frogs!), and how the ending is its own answer to a riddle.

*g* I'm a tease that way, but yeah, I used these concepts to evoke the background necessary. Glad it worked for you.

And thank you for this elaborate feedback.
d_odyssey[info]d_odyssey on August 10th, 2007 02:51 am (UTC)
It was raining and thundering as I read this story this morning. Now it doesn't even matter, because I'm so happy after reading your story. Love the dialogue, especially "sacrificing little power bar replicas." Hee-hee. Also, the hesitant "You and me.." and "maybe I should have." I love this and the last line, too. Now I'm sitting here watching it rain and grinning. Thank you for brightening my day.
daredevil muffin-y genius: john b/w - sga[info]monanotlisa on August 10th, 2007 10:32 am (UTC)
*beam* Thanks for sharing this. Now I'm smiling, too.